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#1 Old 18th Oct 2007 at 10:32 PM
Default Sasha's Creativity
OK I wrote this many years ago, what this is my favorite I have ever written. I use to have a folder of hundreds of poems I have written but it seems that it got lost in a move I made

As the warm blood streams down my face
my now cold souls seems to crack in pieces.
The pain of rejection haunts my mind
with the memory of blumming passion.
The screams of the old days hovers in the air.
Words of the rooms and mimics of the heart
seems to be trapped in the longing of that
one last kiss.

I wrote this after my boyfriend, who is now my husand, broke up with me after a year of dating.
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#2 Old 18th Oct 2007 at 10:35 PM
Wow. I really like it! Its really emotional, and very beautiful. Thankyou for sharing.
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#3 Old 18th Oct 2007 at 10:40 PM
yeah. that is exactly how i felt at the time. lol. It is one of my most beautiful pieces even though short. I havent been able to write something as good since.
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#4 Old 19th Oct 2007 at 1:54 AM
Lovely . The imagery is wonderful. I love how, through poetry and fiction, authors are able to twist words and apply whole new meanings to them through doing so. You seem to have done a fine job of it.

Do I dare disturb the universe?
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#5 Old 19th Oct 2007 at 3:00 AM
thankyou rabid. i appreciate that. an artist always like to hear good feedback from their work.
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